The autumn breeze swayed through her hair, as Maya got out of her car. She had just gotten back from work, like any other day. Only, it wasn’t just any other day. It was her 40th birthday !!
But the day hadn’t been special in any way. To begin with, her husband Pranav had forgotten to even wish her today. Things had not been too well between them lately. Especially in the last one month, his activities had just added to her suspicions. He was constantly late from work. She often heard him talk in murmuring voices over the phone with someone and he used to immediately hang up when she walked into the room. He was acting aloof and seemed to be hiding something from her.
Her thoughts raced back 15 years. Sweet romantic dates, unexpected gifts, candle light dinners, never-ending compliments … Pranav had practically swept her off her feet in those beautiful days of courtship. Their marriage had been as beautiful if not more than their courtship. And now, where is that flame? Where is that romance?
She was jolted back to the present when a single drop of rain fell on her cheek from nowhere. As she walked to the front door of her house, her thoughts continued. So what had gone wrong? Was any of it her fault? Did she distance herself from Pranav? Was she too busy for him? She had just drowned herself in her work to escape the void of not having any children. But does that justify ignoring Pranav. She didn’t have any answers, and was too tired to think of one as well.
As she opened the front door and walked into the empty house, her glance fell on the huge picture on the wall. The picture of the two of them … from their wedding day. She stood there and looked at the picture for a long while. That love in their eyes. Where is that love now?
As she walked into the living room, her eyes were drawn to an envelope on the coffee table. For some reason, she didn’t like the sight of it. As she walked towards the envelope, she saw her name written on it, in Pranav’s handwriting.
As she picked up the envelope and opened it, there was a letter inside. She began reading it …
I know that this letter might not be the best thing happening to you today, but I had to do this, one day or another. As you might have noticed, there has been a certain emptiness in our relationship lately. And I wouldn’t want to blame either of us. Neither do I want to ponder about its reasons.
I just wanted to tell you that it has become unbearable to me. I’m sure you might have noticed by now that I haven’t been totally honest with you in the last month. My activities must have raised thoughts in your mind.
To clear it all, let me confess. There is someone else in my life now. And I have decided to start a new life with her. Today, I am leaving this house forever … and I am leaving you.
None of this is your fault.
Regards
Pranav.
Maya just dropped onto the couch. She felt like the room was spinning. How could Pranav leave her? How could he have found someone else? How? Why?
Thoughts from the past raced through her mind. He had always been there with her, supported her through all of life’s struggles. When she was ill, when she lost her job, when their doctor declared that she could never be a mother … every single time, Pranav was there to support her. What would she do now? She had no one to call her own.
She felt like the world froze around her. She didn’t know what to think or how to react. She just sat there gazing at her hands. And her eyes fell on her ring. The beautiful diamond ring that shone on her finger. And she immediately thought of the day Pranav had proposed to her. He had taken her to her mother’s grave, a very unusual place for anyone to propose, and said, “Will you let me be the mother you lost? Will you let me take care of you forever? Will you marry me?” And she had said yes with eyes filled with tears. Tears of joy!
Today her eyes were filled with tears too. But these were tears of pain. As she looked at the ring, she slowly took it off her finger. She walked over to the kitchen counter and took out a heavy mortar. She started pounding on the ring until the diamond cracked into pieces. She calmly collected the pieces and stared at them. And before she knew it, she had gulped down the pieces with a glass of water.
Why would she even live without Pranav? What was the meaning of life without him? She was starting to feel weak and just wanted to lie down. She slowly walked upstairs to her bedroom. Their fifteen years of married life flashed before her eyes. Pranav had never given her any pain, ever. He was always there, to love her, to support her, to take care of her. Until now... On her 40th birthday! He had left her all alone without a word. She did not find a reason to live anymore.
As she opened her bedroom door, she heard a loud “SURPRISE” !!! And before her eyes, were all the friends she had ever had, right from kindergarten to her present company. And amongst them, standing with a wonderful smile, was Pranav. In his hands, a dozen luscious red roses.

6 comments:
Hey amazing.....I enjoyed them both very much....din know u had so much talent hidden in you !!!!!! Don't get me wrong, but as i read thru....the endings were kind of predictable...maybe you should do something to make them less predictable.....maybe more characters, diff. locales....am just suggesting....am definitely not the expert in this area.....anyways.....way to go girl...its good to see you doing things that you like to do....
Love always
Yaminee Arasu
hi sweetie s ...this is a great idea ... very nice writting.... appy brithday was a lil predictable tho ......love the color ur pic ..:) keep it up.
Hey di..nice story man.. but tragic ofcourse.. I used to write some random stuff too.. but mine were more like happily every after.. Guess i cant get away from fairy tales :))
Dear Anni,
I liked this story better than the last one and here is my feedback
(+) It had a better flow
(+) I liked the ending
(+) I really liked Pranav’s proposal (cool idea and I will put it good use!!)
(-) It’s still a little predictable as I knew there was a surprise party with a lot of people by the end of the second paragraph and by the time I read about an envelope I kind of guessed the content… however saying all this I did not expect her to die in the end.
Regards
Suman
Hi Kamini...
I just came across ur blog and i happend to read the amazing short story....it was in flow and i never expected she will die.....all together it was an awesome short story dear :)
Hope i will visit more to read more stories.........
Hey,
I was just searching for some blogs and found yours and liked it.Yes as all the rest of the commented ...it was kinda predictable but the tragic ending was a good twist to the story.The poems are wonderful and u sure r "gifted" .
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